you and I could be forever, then
you bared your teeth
before showing me the twist
of your back.
I tried tracking your steps, but
(the new you) felt wrong—
your face un-filled, un-real, gone.
Once, when you were still
untwisted, you wrote to me,
“My heart and your heart
know we are meant to grow
side by side, you and I.”
But your tongue inked lies—
your heart was made for walking
away (blind, blind and all alone),
when the growing gets un-easy.
for Poets and Storytellers United (Writers’Pantry #41: Writers’ Pantry #41: “for her unmistakable poetic voice”), inspired by Weekly Scribblings #40: Walking Away.
Lots of heartbreak woven into this gem ....ReplyDelete
Describes practically everyone's love life at some point or another! Such exes are why voodoo dolls were invented.ReplyDelete
Kove this comment!Delete
@Debra, romantic relationships, friendships... pretty much any relationship with we put our hearts into. And I just finished reading Alice Hoffman's Magic Lessons, so your voodoo dolls comment made me laugh extra hard (while looking over my shoulder).Delete
@Rosemary, I love it too! 😜
That is the trouble with romance, attraction fades and you see a different person in front of you...so get rid of them quick!ReplyDelete
No need to hold on to someone who is sucking the life out of you, friend or romantic partner.Delete
Sometimes we have to face the hard realities – including that people will make their own choices, however wrong they may appear to us.ReplyDelete
(My, that's a scary picture you used! Makes me wonder which came first, image or words.)
They sort of came at around the same time. I had been drafting this poem (while waiting to see the doctor, lol) when a friend sent me the image, with a note that said, "Isn't this f*cking creepy!?" I didn't disagree.
Betrayal. It hurts. Deeply.ReplyDelete
Everyone involved, even if it doesn't seem that way at first.Delete
This is a poem I identify with, Magaly, as if it was inked deep in my skin, you wove a spell to charm it to the surface, and now I can’t rub it out. It seems, no matter how hard we try, we never forget that twist of the back.ReplyDelete
I'm right there with you, Kim. That twist is hard to overlook, one it has been noticed.Delete
I once knew someone like this; only you described her better. Funny how we "knew" it the first time but....ReplyDelete
It seems too many of us have met this individual.Delete
"...Once, when you were stillReplyDelete
untwisted..." Oh, dem wuz da days, eh?
Great work, MG.
Pretty much, lol!Delete
This gives me shivers--"un-easy" fits the eeriness.ReplyDelete
Thank you, Chrissa. 🖤❤️Delete
Sometimes I think my own heart is made for walking away. Ah, me!ReplyDelete
And thank goodness for that. Sometimes our hearts must walk away (in self-defense).Delete
this pulls all the right levers. it hurts.ReplyDelete
Thanks very much, Lee San.Delete
I'm really liking the word twist here. The poem also makes me think about the word "stab" and in the back.ReplyDelete
So glad you noticed!Delete
People do change during the course of a relationship, but a lot of "could be forever"s have been cut down when lies were the way the changes were dealt with. Were those lies worth it to the liar?ReplyDelete
A bitter sweet tale of love lost to longingReplyDelete
Stay safe. Happy Sunday
An affecting and great response to the prompt. Your poem is so relatable as all, at some point in our lives, we get lied to and left heartbroken.ReplyDelete
That seems to be the story.Delete
Seems we have to encounter heartbreak before we open our eyes to the true definition of love. Beautiful poem, penned with the ink of despair.ReplyDelete
It does seem that way, doesn't it?Delete
Heartbreak...It hurts even when walking away is needed. I have found my heart broken several times the last few years. Not all heartbreak is wrapped with romance. "when the growing gets uneasy" Love that.ReplyDelete
You know what, I can't say that I have really been heartbroken when it comes to romance. Every time my heart has been left bloody, it has been by the boots of family or friends. Hm... I don't think I had ever really thought about that before.Delete
Betrayal...part of lifes thorny road. Painful..but you can be proud of yourself if you would never do that to another . We all hope one day to meet someone worthy ,not just in romance but in friendship and other situations.You know why Diogenes always had a lamp in his hand?...He was looking for an honest man...Yep and guess what...you know the answer already LOLReplyDelete
No wonder we value the worthy ones so much--they are so hard to find!Delete
Hey Beautiful Soul!ReplyDelete
I have missed your awesome words!! Your heart always knows! Never go against it!!
Big Hugs! I hope you are safe and healthy!!
The heart might take a while to see (or believe) what's going on, but when it does... we should certainly listen.Delete
I am safe and relatively healthy. Hope the same is true for you!
Words and image blend again to write a creepier story than any movie effects could manage XXXReplyDelete
Coming from you, my Gina love, this has made my day!Delete