I am not saying that my cousin didn’t have any faults, because she
did: sometimes she borrowed books and would not return them until asked, she often used ALL CAPS to
show excitement or outrage, and she was convinced that sugar was the most
important thing in the universe. So she
enjoyed chocolate meringue pie for breakfast and feasted in
honeyed spotted dick for lunch, so what? Her body was hers to use as she
Yes, my cousin was weird.
But being peculiar—and perhaps nutty enough
think that building a cottage out gingerbread, cake, and pastries was a good
idea—does not make a person evil. It was her land, her sugar, her magic. And no
one had the right to tell
her what to
especially not two
homicidal little brats with entitlement issues.
So that is a hard NO, Your
Honor. I will not remove the death curse my cousin put on Hansel and Gretel. They
shall never be able to eat anything but sweets: not when their teeth start to
rot, not when their blood
turns treacle black, not when their hearts are
so inflamed they pop. If they eat anything other than gingerbread and cake and
pastries—oh my!—their privates will turn into a public sugarcane and pumpkin
spectacle. But I am not completely
I have an apple they can eat without being affected by my cousin’s curse.
- for Poets and Storytellers United--Friday Writings #5: A Second(ary) Look, where we are asked to write poetry or prose from the point of view of a secondary character in a story (book, movie, TV show…). I chose to write from the point of view of a cousin of the witch in Hansel and Gretel. Yes, I noticed just how much this quite recently concocted cousin sounds like a version of the Evil Queen who seems to have read The Wizard of Oz. 😁
Wow, that's a different point of view all right! Yet it's all there in the story with just a slight change of angle. And oh, the gruesome fate that befalls the brats – you might have cured me of ever eating sweets again! But I especially chill to the sinister alternative the narrator proposes.ReplyDelete
Villainous cousins can be lethal.Delete
Very clever, Magaly, and I appreciate the courtroom drama as well. However, both HRH and I have a bone to pick with you.ReplyDelete
SINCE WHEN is it a FAULT to use ALL CAPS to show EXCITEMENT or OUTRAGE? REALLY, what next?
Do tell HRH that I do not support all of the cousin's ways. Just some. The EXCITING ones!Delete
Oh, I do like this! They were quite entitled, weren't they? Being abandoned by their step-mother, with a father who allowed it, and lost in the forest in no excuse.ReplyDelete
(Have you ever read The Book of Lost Things? It alludes to so many tales, with twists. It's not a child's story by any means! It is one of my favorites.)
Thank you, Lisa! I don't know if Magaly has read that, but I haven't, and from what you say of it I clearly must.Delete
My thoughts exactly, Lisa! Having bad in life doesn't mean that one must become a thief.Delete
I've read The Book of Lost Things. I love the retellings, and how they are structure. Coincidentally, I just finished rereading it.
@Rosemary, I think you'll enjoy it.
Interesting take from a different viewpoint! Now I'm going to wonder about the cousin of every major character in my books!ReplyDelete
Maybe, one day, we'll write the book of cousins, lol!Delete
HAHAHahahahahahah!!!! OMG I LUUUUURVES when you write like this XXXReplyDelete
I love you, did you know that?Delete
A perfect story for Creepmas, this gingerbread loving time of the year.ReplyDelete
It certainly felt that way.Delete
what an interesting Look ..loved itReplyDelete
Thank you, Anjum.Delete
😁😁😁this is so good for the gigglesReplyDelete
I did giggle (and cackle) while writing it.Delete
Wicked witches have to stick together!ReplyDelete
Well, that's definitely a new (and still dark) take on the story. :)ReplyDelete
i really enjoyed the twist in the story, and fairy tales with a modern setting.
A film even portray Hansel and Gretel as witch hunters.
Who doesn't enjoy a little twist, right?Delete
Your imagination was working overtime. May I say WELL DONE in caps?!ReplyDelete
YES, you may!Delete
Bwahahahahahahahahhahahahahahaha! That is a clever story. I adore the new spin you put on the old tale.ReplyDelete
One of these days, I must retell Jack and the Beanstalk. I wonder what the giant would do to that little delinquent.Delete
We have a delicious ice cream here called death by chocolate....your cuz would love it.Surrounded by people with entitlement issues... love this term ...we have a term for that here as well ....but it would not pass the censorReplyDelete
Bwahahaha! I shall imagine it.Delete
Your story make me laugh! A darkly delightful response to the prompt. And oh, the fun but tedious work of building a cottage out of gingerbread or ginger cookies. I'm avoiding that this Christmas.:DReplyDelete
We planned to build one. Got all the ingredients. Then realized how much work it would be, so just made gingerbread people (the not-so-Little Princes and my Piano Man ate them all).Delete
I like this backstory of the cousin. I've always imagined Hansel and Gretel as fat little, self-entitled &~%$#@!*ReplyDelete
Joel, you are a very wise man!Delete
This is a fantastic twist on a familiar fairy tale! Hahahaa!ReplyDelete
Yay, for laughter!Delete
Great point of view. I love this, Magaly!ReplyDelete
Thank you, Sara.Delete
Ha! this is really clever! Love itReplyDelete
Thank you. It was so much fun to write!Delete